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You have been working with your company for two years and are interested in a promotion. Write a letter to your direct boss. In your letter: · Explain your varied achievements over the past two years · Express your interest in growing with the company · Ask for a meeting to discuss a potential promotion

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Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing
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 letter to talk regarding the promotion of my current position. First of all, I want to thank you for your support and appreciation during my difficult project
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. As you know I have been working in the
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 since 2021 and I am in the same position at that time. I handled many tough projects for our
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 under your guidance.
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, In 2021 after my six months in
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, you trusted me and gave me one lakeside project which was very important for us and I was awarded for that project.
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, I
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 participated in different events of the
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 and dealt with foreign companies.
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, now I want to grow with
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company
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 and want to tackle some other tasks. I like to talk in person regarding my promotion and want to meet with you, whenever you are free. I hope you understand my perspective and set a meeting as soon as possible. Yours Faithfully,
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Task Response
You could elaborate a bit more on your varied achievements and specific responsibilities to strengthen your case for a promotion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to refine your grammar and sentence structures to make your letter more polished and professional.
Suitable Writing Tone
Your letter had a clear and courteous tone throughout.
Task Achievement
You included several relevant examples of your achievements, which enrich your request for a promotion.
Logical Structure
The letter has a logical structure, beginning with an introduction, followed by the main body, and ending with a polite closing.
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