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In some countries, younger people are neglecting their right to vote. What problems does this cause and what are some of the possible solutions

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Youths in some
countries
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 are not bothered by their polling rights . Either because of neglect or unavailability for voting .
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 can lead to the formation of governments which do not emphasize issues of the early adults .
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, the new generation can leave their nation to another of their choice .
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 may be managed by educating them about politics
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 using modern technology for voting
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 ,the main issue a nation could face , when the new generation neglects politics is that
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the forming government policies might not contain solutions for the problems of the youth in that
country
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 .
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 , the newer adults who are not happy with the
country
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's rules and regulations are expected to move out of their home
country
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 to a better place of their choice .
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, many of the younger population from South Asian
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 are moving to other
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 reason . A possible solution to tackle
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 issue is to raise awareness among new adults by educating them regarding the importance of politics in the
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 and the need for youngsters to be involved in that .
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 may be implemented by conducting live programmes and utilising social media for that .
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, another possibility is that many of the youngsters might be engaged in studies or jobs in other places out of their home towns . In most nations to cast votes, they need to report to their local area , which might not be possible always .
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 may be tackled by the usage of electronic devices for distant voting .
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, some
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 have started e-voting for their nationals who are out of place .
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 , new generation youths, are abandoning polling rights in some nations ,
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 can lead to governments with policies that do not support youth , resulting in them moving out of the
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 eventually .
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 may be tackled by proper awareness and usage of modern technology for casting votes

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratic process
  • political instability
  • skewed representation
  • governance
  • erosion
  • civic education
  • alienation
  • policy-making
  • accessible
  • incentives
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