The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.
The given bar chart represents the information about global sales of five different notable mobile phone
brands
in every other two-years
period, from 2009 to 2013, indicated as thousand Correct your spelling
two-year
dollars
per unit.
Overall
, it can clearly observed that an
average Correct article usage
the
sale
figures from Fix the agreement mistake
sales
Samsung
, Apple
, and Nokia
experienced an upward trend, whereas
that
from Correct determiner usage
those
other
two Correct article usage
the other
brands
underwent a downward trend. However
, it is intersting
to note that the Correct your spelling
interesting
overall
revenues from both Samsung
and Nokia
are relatively high throughout the given time frame.
Starting in 2009, at around 420,000 dollars
, Nokia
yielded the greatest profits among all other
four popular Correct article usage
the other
brands
, followed by Samsung
and LG, at 230,000 dollars
and at 130,000 dollars
, respectively. Similarly
, trends of the top two aforementioned brand
in 2011 can be seen that Fix the agreement mistake
brands
Nokia
experienced slightly inclined figures while
that of Samsung
increased roughly
about 100,000 bucks. Change preposition
by roughly
On the other hand
, the number of mobil
Correct your spelling
mobile
phone
purchased from ZTE was twofold that of Fix the agreement mistake
phones
Apple
in 2009 before overtaking by Apple
in the next two year
.
Ending in 2013, at 450,000 Fix the agreement mistake
years
dollars
, Samsung
reached its peaked
Replace the word
peak
sale
figures which outnumbered its Fix the agreement mistake
sales
first rank
rival. The other three Add a hyphen
first-rank
brands
grow
differently at a gradual rate where both Wrong verb form
grew
Apple
and ZTE was
rising, Correct subject-verb agreement
were
LG
demand slowly dropping.Correct word choice
and LG
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