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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad.

Over the
last
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 few years, the number of people who prefer to live or
study
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 abroad
have
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 increased significantly.
Although
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 there are several advantages
of
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 leaving your
country
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, it can have some disadvantages as well. In
this
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 essay, I will try to discuss both
positive
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 and negative sides of
this
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 and draw a conclusion.
Firstly
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, I would like to discuss several positive aspects of
live
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living
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 or
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study
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studying
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 abroad. The first benefit of it is considered to be that educational opportunities.
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, you can
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Enternational
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International
 Institute. So you can find
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well paid
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 job and can create
future
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 career. Another positive aspect is thought to be that personal growth.
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 because you can learn
foreign
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culture
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cultures
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 and contact
foreign
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a foreign
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country
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's people and you can grow your
world-view
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worldview
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 and ideology.
Secondly
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, I would like to discuss some of
negative
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the negative
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 aspects of leaving your
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. One of the major
drawback
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drawbacks
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 of it is
that
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apply
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homesickness.
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, you might miss your family, friends and relatives. So you might want to go to your home and meet them. Another important demerit is
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apply
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financial problems. The reason for
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 is that you might experience
lack
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 of money problems because
of
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studying and living abroad
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can be expensive. So you have got to work harder. In general, it can be said that leaving your
country
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 to live or
study
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 abroad can offer several positives,
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but there
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 may be some drawbacks too. From my personal point of view,
advantages
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the advantages
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 of it will outweigh the disadvantages.

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task achievement
Try to use more specific examples to support your points. For example, mention specific scholarships or exchange programs that can offer financial support.
task achievement
Work on sentence variety and complexity to enhance clarity and comprehension. Consider using more complex sentence structures.
coherence cohesion
Improve transitions between your points to create a smoother flow of ideas. For example, use conjunctions like 'moreover,' 'in addition,' and 'furthermore' to link your ideas more cohesively.
coherence cohesion
Check for grammatical errors and improve sentence structure. For example, 'live or study abroad' should be 'living or studying abroad' in some contexts.
task achievement
Your introduction clearly states the purpose of the essay and sets the context for the discussion.
coherence cohesion
You provided a balanced view by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of living or studying abroad.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your points and provides a personal viewpoint.
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