Some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In nowadays
, we have Change preposition
Nowadays
a lots
of Correct the article-noun agreement
a lot
lots
environment
problems on Replace the word
environmental
earth
. A certain number of Capitalize word
Earth
people
, looking for life on other planets. But other
side of Correct article usage
the other
people
think, that government
shouldn’t spend money Correct article usage
the government
to
Change preposition
on
this
, cause earth
Correct article usage
the earth
have
other big problems. Change the verb form
has
This
is a controversial point, but we can discuss this
moment.
Environmental problems are not new to the earth
. And scientists always researches
solutions for Correct subject-verb agreement
research
this
kind of issues
. Fix the agreement mistake
issue
For example
, Overpopulation. Because of this
our Add a comma
this,
planet
faced
with the problem of resource constraints. Add a missing verb
is faced
And relocation
to another Correct word choice
Relocation
planet
can help to solve problem
with water, food Fix the agreement mistake
problems
shortage
and other necessary resources for living.
Fix the agreement mistake
shortages
On the other hand
, moving to other
Correct quantifier usage
another
planet
are
not the easiest solution. Because Correct subject-verb agreement
is
government
should spend to this
large money. For example
, the number of people
on earth
is around 8 billion. And we need technology to transport all of Capitalize word
Earth
this
Correct determiner usage
these
people
. Also
, government
should establish infrastructure and Add an article
the government
living
environment. Which is hard to do.
To summarise, both of Correct article usage
a living
this
sides had logical reasons, but we should think about every aspect to do something. I believe, that moving to another Correct determiner usage
these
planet
is very
hard idea and wasting of money. Add an article
a very
the very
Government
should do a lot’s
of things to bring it to life.Change noun form
lot
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task achievement
Try to refine your introduction to clearly present both views without errors. Use phrases like "On one hand..." and "On the other hand..." to highlight the contrasting opinions.
task achievement
Work on developing your ideas more fully. Provide clear examples and explanations related to both views to add depth to your essay.
task achievement
Ensure your main points are well-supported. Instead of general statements, use specific details or data to back up your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Improve your sentence structure and grammar. For instance, "In nowadays" should be "Nowadays" or "In modern times," and "a lot’s" should be "a lot".
coherence cohesion
Enhance your logical structure by using cohesive devices like "Firstly," "Secondly," "Moreover," and "However." This will help in connecting your ideas smoothly.
task achievement
You have acknowledged both perspectives concerning spending on space exploration and addressing earth's problems, which is a good start.
coherence cohesion
You have made an attempt to conclude your essay by summarizing both views and providing your opinion, which is essential for a cohesive piece.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?