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Some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In nowadays
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, we have
a lots
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 of
environment
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environmental
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 problems on
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earth
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Earth
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. A certain number of
people
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, looking for life on other planets. But
other
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the other
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 side of
people
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 think, that
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government
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the government
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 shouldn’t spend money
to
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this
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, cause
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earth
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the earth
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have
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 other big problems.
This
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 is a controversial point, but we can discuss
this
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 moment. Environmental problems are not new to the
earth
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. And scientists always
researches
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research
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 solutions for
this
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 kind of
issues
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issue
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.
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, Overpopulation. Because of
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this
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this,
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 our
planet
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faced
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 with the problem of resource constraints.
And relocation
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 to another
planet
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 can help to solve
problem
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problems
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 with water, food
shortage
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shortages
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 and other necessary resources for living.
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, moving to
other
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another
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planet
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are
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 not the easiest solution. Because
government
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 should spend to
this
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 large money.
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, the number of
people
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 on
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earth
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Earth
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 is around 8 billion. And we need technology to transport all of
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this
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these
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people
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.
Also
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,
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government
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the government
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 should establish infrastructure and
living
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a living
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 environment. Which is hard to do. To summarise, both of
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this
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these
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 sides had logical reasons, but we should think about every aspect to do something. I believe, that moving to another
planet
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 is
very
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a very
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 hard idea and wasting of money.
Government
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 should do a
lot’s
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lot
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 of things to bring it to life.

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task achievement
Try to refine your introduction to clearly present both views without errors. Use phrases like "On one hand..." and "On the other hand..." to highlight the contrasting opinions.
task achievement
Work on developing your ideas more fully. Provide clear examples and explanations related to both views to add depth to your essay.
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Ensure your main points are well-supported. Instead of general statements, use specific details or data to back up your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Improve your sentence structure and grammar. For instance, "In nowadays" should be "Nowadays" or "In modern times," and "a lot’s" should be "a lot".
coherence cohesion
Enhance your logical structure by using cohesive devices like "Firstly," "Secondly," "Moreover," and "However." This will help in connecting your ideas smoothly.
task achievement
You have acknowledged both perspectives concerning spending on space exploration and addressing earth's problems, which is a good start.
coherence cohesion
You have made an attempt to conclude your essay by summarizing both views and providing your opinion, which is essential for a cohesive piece.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented opportunities
  • extraterrestrial
  • satisfy human curiosity
  • practical benefits
  • inspiring goal
  • testament to human ambition
  • pursuit of knowledge
  • critics argue
  • imprudent
  • plague Earth
  • immediate attention
  • allocated for
  • environmental conservation
  • well-being
  • quality of life
  • balanced approach
  • advancements
  • benefits for humanity
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