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The bar charts illustrate the average years of schooling, scientists and technicians per 1000 people and also the participation levels in research and development in developing and industrialised countries during 1980 and 1990.

The bar charts illustrate the average years of schooling, scientists and technicians per 1000 people and also the participation levels in research and development in developing and industrialised countries during 1980 and 1990.
#bar #years #scientists #technicians #people #participation #levels #research #development #countries
The three
separated
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 diagrams portray the difference
of
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 developing and industrialised
countries
' average
years
 of schooling, scientists and technicians per 1000 people and
also
 the participation levels in
research
 and
development
 from 1980 to 1990.
Overall
, people in the industrialised
countries
 spent more of
the
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 days in schooling,
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 more scientists and utilized more in
the
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research
 and
development
. Apart from that, the developing
countries
 spent
lesser
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 in the later ten
years
 compared to
last
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the last
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 ten
years
 in
research
 and
development
. Meanwhile, the data that has increased way more than others was the amount of money spent
in
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research
 and
development
 by the industrialised
countries
. In
details
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, the average
years
 of schooling of the developing
countries
raised
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 from 2
years
 to just almost 1 year
while
 the industrialised
countries
 extended it to exactly 1 year in 10
years
 gap. The researchers and the technicians in every 1000
peoplse
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people
 has increased from approximately 40 to around 80 in the industrialised
countries
while
 the developing
countries
increasedto
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increased to
increased
just
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 20 from 10.
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this
 figure, it
resulted
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 the
researches
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research
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 and
development
 of
industrialsed
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industrialised
industrialized
countries
to increase
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 way too far from the
development
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developed
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countries
. It increases
to
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from 150 to almost 400.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, years, research, development with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts
  • average
  • schooling
  • scientists
  • technicians
  • participation
  • research and development
  • developing countries
  • industrialized countries
  • 1980
  • 1990
  • comparison
  • trends
  • differences
  • education
  • research levels
  • potential reasons
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