The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the transformation of a public
library
over twenty years.
Overall
, the central
library
has undergone significant changes in the record period, the most prominent of which are a dedicated area for events, self-service facilities, and a cafe. Especially, there is an open space in the center. Twenty years ago, when one entered the
library
, they could find newspapers and magazines in the reading
room
to the left of their hand.
However
,
this
room
has now been altered to a computer
room
. On the right-hand side, the old enquiry desk was removed to make
room
for the cafe area.
Instead
of going to
this
desk and asking librarians for some information for tickets, book returns, etc., readers can go to the information desk and utilize a self-service machine to do that.
Also
, adult fiction
books
have been relocated to the right, making
room
for all reference
books
on the left. In the middle of the Central
Library
, all tables and chairs have been removed to make an open space. The back section of the
library
has
also
witnessed radical alterations, with the
room
in the left-hand corner that accommodated CDs, videos, and computer games being enlarged to house fiction
books
for children and two sofas. It
also
serves as a space for hosting storytelling events.
Finally
, there is a lecture
room
in the back right-hand corner where children's
books
used to be.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room, books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • modern technology
  • computer stations
  • multimedia room
  • multi-purpose spaces
  • conference rooms
  • study spaces
  • community-oriented services
  • accessibility
  • wider aisles
  • ramps
  • designated areas
  • people with disabilities
  • cafeteria
  • coffee shop
  • leisurely space
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