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TASK 1. The diagram below how tomato ketchup is made. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The first diagram illustrates the
process
 of
glass
 container production, and the second diagram depicts how to recycle used
glass
.
It is clear that
 the manufacturing
process
 consists of four distinct stages with three main materials.
Besides
, there are five steps to turn used
glass
 into new
glass
 products. At the first step in the
process
 of producing
glass
 containers, melting the mixture including sand, soda ash, limestone, and other chemical in a temperature averaging about 1500°C. Following that, molten
glass
 is shaped by blowing after melting in
glass
furance
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furnace
.
At
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 the final steps, the
glass
 containers are done and sent to consumers.
Subsequently
, the
glass
 recycling
process
 begins with collecting the used
glass
 before classifying them into
colour
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colours
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. After that, the used
glass
 containers are washed to remove impurities. The next step involves crushing and melting the used
glass
 in order to mould them into new products which is brought to users.
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introduction conclusion present
Include an explicit conclusion to enhance completeness.
complete response
Make sure to address all parts of the task appropriately and clearly; your coverage is good, but a bit more detail in comparing both processes would elevate it.
logical structure
Pay attention to minor grammatical issues and improve cohesion between thoughts.
complete response
The essay effectively summarises the two processes, hitting most of the main points required.
clear comprehensive ideas
The main stages and steps involved in both the production and recycling processes are clearly outlined.
logical structure
The essay logically presents the steps in both processes, creating a coherent flow of information.

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