Many believe that the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowdays
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we have
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variety
kinds of
problem
environmental. Some of
this
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these
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issues
related
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are related
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to
fuel
but
on the other hand
hig
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a higher
persantage
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percentage
of them combined
whit
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with
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another
problem
such
as deforestation that
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the gaverment
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gaverment
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government
should solve
it
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. In my view,
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disagree with the
statment
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statement
above.
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essay will discuss some reasons in the following paragraphs. The main reason which convinces me to support
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this days
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we have
huge
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problem
rather than gasoline consumption at first we must solve it .
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, deforestation is one of those problems that
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
should
handling
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.
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, they can make some regulations confront
to
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which
pople
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people
cut
the
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tree
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trees
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and build
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in
jungle
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.
Therefore
, for
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earth has
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an important
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topic,
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that pople
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pople
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people
must follow up
.
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Nevertheless
, there is no doubt topic of fossil fuels
very
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important.To be more exact,
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because
nowdays
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humen
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humans
are so
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busy
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the car
a car
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car
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so they
should
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use petrol and gasoline so we
faced
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to
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some issues
such
as air pollution and global warming. To exemplify,
government
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the government
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can make
rule
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rules
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and increase the price of
fuel
because
pople
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people
reduce
fuel
consumption.
Hence
, one of the solutions can
controlled
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the
envirmental
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environmental
problem
is
increased
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to increase
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the price. In conclusion, on the basis of the points above, it is true
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that consuming
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the
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fuel
is one of the
problem
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problems
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but every coin has two sides and we have a lot of
another problems
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that
cen
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can
solved first .So, from my perspective, individuals
at
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first must make some laws about cat
tree
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trees
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becuse
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because
they are very important rather than
another
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other
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problems.
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