Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words. The graph beow shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 2005.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

You should write at least 150 words.

The graph beow shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 2005.
The line graph illustrates
radio
and
television
audiences in Korea throughout the day from October to December
in
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2005. It is evident that the Korean population usually listened to the
radio
the most at 9 am.
On the other hand
, the
television
watching
rate
was high from 4
pm
to 10
pm
. Looking at the data in more detail, we can see that the most noticeable prime time for the
radio
was at 9 o’clock in the morning when approximately 27% of Koreans listened to the
radio
, which only lasted for a short period since the
audience
rate
decreased after that. The second small
rise
in the
radio
’s
audience
rate
was at 4
pm
and
then
dropped again at 6
pm
, with the highest
audience
rate
during
this
rise
being 15%. The
last
and smallest
rise
was at approximately
early
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10
pm
and only lasted no longer than 20 minutes until 11
pm
before dropping again.
In contrast
, the
television
’s
audience
rate
was significantly lower in the morning. The first
rise
was at half past eight in the morning with approximately 7%
audience
rate
and remained steady until 10 am before dropping. The second
rise
started at 1
pm
and hit the peak at around 2
pm
with approximately 16%
audience
rate
then
dropped again after 30 minutes. The prime time for
television
started at 4
pm
and rapidly climbed to a peak of 55% at 8
pm
then
started to decline rapidly after 10
pm
. In summary, two significant points can be observed from
this
line graph. The first point is that Koreans appeared to listen to the
radio
the most in the morning,
whereas
they usually watched
television
the most in the evening. The second point is that even though there were different time popularity patterns between
radio
and
television
, which did not overlap each other,
television
was still far more popular among Koreans
according to
the
overall
audience
rate
throughout the day.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words radio, television, rate, pm, audience, rise with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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