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Is it better to live in a countryside or in a city? Explain your reasons and give examples .

it is believed that the optimal
life
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 is an intrinsic and important act. urban or rural are preferable places for living. I believe that urban
life
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 more easier than rural.
due to
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 facilities and technology services that are provided to the societies. First of all, urban
life
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in other words
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 means modern architecture you can find all you want health care, shopping centres, Universities, restaurants, Bars, and flair buildings.
in addition
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 to appealing a technology from governments in many aspects of
life
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 “utilities and Internet services…etc. In spite of the
living
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high living
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cost
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costs
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 in the
city
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 in expensive
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,
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you can reach what you want without any effort and no need to waste a long time
to get
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getting
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 to the
city
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centers
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centres
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.
For instance
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, I have been living in the
city
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 since I was a child. In fact, I was used to a fast and noisy
life
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 and opportunities that were valid
such
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 as studying or working.
On the other hand
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, in the rural, you can’t get easy access to the facilities. So, the essential needs are mostly absent which makes it difficult.
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, there is less intervention from municipalities.
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, a lot of people would rather live in urban.
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 the landscape and quiet that’s valid in the rural do not exist in the urban.
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, always in vacations, I prefer to travel to the countryside to release the stress and noise that I had got from the
city
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.
To sum up
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, choosing of place depends on the quality of natural
life
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 that’s people looking for. Eventually, both areas have fundamental purposes and suit all communities.

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task achievement
Your essay presents a clear argument and compares living in the countryside and the city effectively, but it would benefit from more specific examples to strengthen your points. For example, you could elaborate on specific instances of how modern technology makes urban life easier.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow between your sentences and paragraphs for better coherence. Use more cohesive devices like linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly.
coherence cohesion
You have successfully outlined your main points and provided a clear introduction and conclusion. This gives your essay a good structure, which is essential for readability.
task achievement
Your essay presents a balanced view by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of living in urban and rural areas. This enhances the overall comprehensiveness of your response.
task achievement
Your personal example of preferring to vacation in the countryside provides a nice touch of relatability and supports your argument well.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • tranquil
  • serenity
  • bustling
  • amenities
  • prospects
  • healthier lifestyle
  • employment opportunities
  • cultural experiences
  • educational institutions
  • noise pollution
  • cost of living
  • crowded
  • infrastructure
  • urban sprawl
  • communal ties
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