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`The graph below shows home heating fuel choice according to the year the house was built. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisions where relevant

`The graph below shows home heating fuel choice according to the year the house was built. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisions where relevant
The line graphs illustrate the information about households
chose
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choosing
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an
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apply
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electricity
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 and natural
gas
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 for heating
according to
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 a construction year
since
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from
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 before 1950 to 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that a building which was constructed before 1950 mainly used natural
gas
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 as
power
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a power
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 source
about
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for about
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 60% of homes and remained at the same level till 1969, and
then
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 fell significantly
approximately
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by approximately
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 15% between 1969 and 1989, after that the amount of
gas
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 used by residents stayed at 45% until 2010. In comparison,
An
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apply
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electricity
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 was less popular than
electricity
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 at the beginning, starting with 15%.
However
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, the total number of accomodations preferred to use electricities as heating fuel increased steadily throughout the period with 10% every 20 years. Eventually, in 2010 the need
of
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for
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electricity
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 and natural
gas
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 was at the same level
accouting
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accounting
 for 45%.
To conclude
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, it is noticeable that people
used
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use
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electricity
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instead
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 of natural
gas
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for warming
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to warm
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in
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apply
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their
house
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houses
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moreover
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 in every year through a given period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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