`The graph below shows home heating fuel choice according to the year the house was built. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisions where relevant

`The graph below shows home heating fuel choice according to the year the house was built.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisions where relevant
The line graphs illustrate the information about households
chose
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an
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electricity
and natural
gas
for heating
according to
a construction year
since
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from
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before 1950 to 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that a building which was constructed before 1950 mainly used natural
gas
as
power
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a power
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source
about
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60% of homes and remained at the same level till 1969, and
then
fell significantly
approximately
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by approximately
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15% between 1969 and 1989, after that the amount of
gas
used by residents stayed at 45% until 2010. In comparison,
An
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apply
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electricity
was less popular than
electricity
at the beginning, starting with 15%.
However
, the total number of accomodations preferred to use electricities as heating fuel increased steadily throughout the period with 10% every 20 years. Eventually, in 2010 the need
of
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electricity
and natural
gas
was at the same level
accouting
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accounting
for 45%.
To conclude
, it is noticeable that people
used
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use
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electricity
instead
of natural
gas
for warming
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to warm
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in
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apply
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their
house
Fix the agreement mistake
houses
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moreover
in every year through a given period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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