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Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree

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In recent decades, some employees prefer working in large
companies
 to working for
companies
 which work with a limited number of individuals.
Although
 there are a few negative issues associated with being employed by major firms, I wholeheartedly believe that working with them can be a valuable experience. Advocates, including me, opine that employees in large-scale businesses might benefit from working there.
Firstly
, the opportunities for promotion in
this
 type of firm are more than other firms.
Secondly
, by following some rules and making suitable efforts in the way of enhancing, everyone can achieve enchanting success.
Thirdly
 being a member of famous and successful
companies
 and a sense of satisfaction provide some levels of confidence or pride for them.
For example
, Apple company often make incredible improvements in their products which
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 positive attention from the customer,
then
, their employee regularly gets some respect and appreciation from them.
On the other hand
,
such
 pressure of the competition among leading
companies
, that their experts experience significant stress.
Additionally
, in small firms which is run by a few circle people, their employees can witness a variety of intimation.
Therefore
, these close relations induce a sense of being in a family. Given the fact that in multinational corporations, relationships mostly are based on the qualities of work with prominent rules.
For instance
, based on an article carried out in 20 local shops in Tehran, revealed that
although
 their employee benefits from working there, most of them are often dreaming about working in major corporations. In conclusion, given the facilitated working in a small firm, I firmly believe that many chances are waiting for anyone who is fond of promotion in large
companies
, which I elaborated my reasons for in
this
 essay.
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task achievement
While your essay demonstrates relevant arguments and examples, try to ensure you provide a balanced view by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages in more detail. It will make your essay more comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
Focus on eliminating minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, in the sentences 'including me' and 'Apple company' can be slightly adjusted for better fluency.
task achievement
Your introduction clearly states your opinion and prepares the reader for the points you will discuss.
task achievement
You have provided relevant examples to support your points, such as the example of Apple, which strengthens your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is well-structured, with clear paragraphs dedicated to specific points, making it easy to follow.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your opinion and reiterates the main points discussed in the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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