The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same period.
The above table shows the final number of visitors to Ashdown
Museum
during the year
before renovated and the year
after it, while
the pie charts illustrate the visitor’s satisfaction extent after comparing the museum
before and after the refurbishment.
Overall
, the amount
of visitors increased from 74000 to 92000 tourists throughout the Change the quantifier
number
year
, showing a positive impact on the museum
after finishing the reconstruction. For more accurate data, visitors were asked to do a quick survey asking their satisfaction level after stopping by the museum
, comparing it before and after the renovation.
From the chart, over 35 people stated that they were very satisfied from
the visit after the renovation compared to only 15 people the Change preposition
with
year
before. Majority
of the Correct article usage
The majority
guest
were seen to be on the satisfied level. Fix the agreement mistake
guests
Although
there are still a number of respondents felt
dissatisfied after the reconstruction, the total has decreased significantly in opposition to the period before the refurbishment.Correct pronoun usage
who felt
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