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Many people try to achieve success through their career or education. What can success mean to different people? What is your view of success? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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These days main part of society is attempting to be successful through the career and education sphere. At all achievement is the satisfaction and happiness from work or deed. In
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 for different and add
life
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 experienced information. First of all, there is no exact definition of victory as every individual has own perspective on
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. There are various explanations of fame in the lives of people.
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, people are happy and successful when meet their basic needs of
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 or live happily with their family and close people.
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 happy
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 is a
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 for them. As well population feel successful after sacrificing deeds in order to maintain their relationship.
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, achieving a career goal or getting a high level of qualification becomes a
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 for many of us. But in the materialistic world, financial income is the core element of
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 as it is regarded as a symbol of a happy
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. Following the above discussion, achievement is happiness
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 achieved through facing career goals and education with the mental support of family members,
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, it leads towards financial stability after many years of struggling and hard work.
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, for me, progress means working hard, facing issues in the process toward my goal and in the end achieving my aim and being proud of it.
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, fulfilment of basic needs achieving goals in the education sphere, getting a stabilized financial condition, live a happy
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 with family is a
success
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 for other individuals.
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, in my point of view accomplishments are getting rewarded after hard work.

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Task Achievement
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Introduction & Conclusion
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You have attempted to cover different aspects of success and its varied meanings to different people, showing a good understanding of the task requirements.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fulfillment
  • personal goals
  • happiness
  • career milestones
  • professional development
  • financial independence
  • security
  • philanthropy
  • contribution
  • personal development
  • recognition
  • work-life balance
  • self-improvement
  • well-being
  • subjective
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