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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
According to
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 a certain group of people, the extinction of specific plants and
animals
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 is a major reason for environmental problems,
while
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 others think that it is just a minor problem and does not affect the
environment
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 on a large scale.
This
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 essay will discuss both of these views,
as well as
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 will cover my own perspective.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, the loss of particular
animals
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 and plants may change the
environment
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 in a way
that is
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 not possible to adapt. A decrease in the number of living beings may promote food scarcity and result in shifts in the food chain.
For example
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, a type of animal may be prey for other wild
animals
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, so its extinction badly impacts them and a decrease in food is confronted.
Moreover
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, all plants and
animals
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 together create an ecosystem and if a part of
this
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 system disappears, it may have irreversible consequences.
For instance
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, there are small birds in savannahs that send warning signals to giraffes about a potential danger and the loss of these types of birds can
also
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 cause a decrease in the number of giraffes.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, the problems that occur
due to
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 human interactions are harder to fix and have a more negative impact on the
environment
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.
Firstly
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, the waste
that is
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 released into water, air or soil does not only affect one type
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 but
also
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 damages the whole ecosystem. Poisonous chemicals that fishermen use cause a strict reduction in fish species.
Furthermore
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, deforestation - a drawback of extended manufacturing which destroys a vast range of areas where
animals
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 live . Amazon rainforest is a great example of deforestation where every year thousands of
animals
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 leave their habitats.
Conclusion
To sum up
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although
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 some see the reduction in the number of living beings as a serious environmental problem, a part of society thinks that we damage the
environment
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 more with our actions. In my opinion, the loss of some species is a natural process and nature can recover itself in a short time, but if we don't stop to destroy the
environment
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 for our benefit,
then
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 it will have long-lasting results.

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clear comprehensive ideas
Try to elaborate a little more on the benefits or risks of focusing on these perspectives to offer a more comprehensive discussion.
relevant specific examples
Ensure that each main point is directly linked to a part of the question to improve relevance.
complete response
The essay presents a balanced view by discussing both sides of the issue before stating a personal opinion.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly sets up the essay's purpose, and the conclusion effectively summarizes your opinion.
logical structure
The essay shows a logical progression of ideas, helping the reader follow your argument effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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