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Forests are the lungs of the earth. Destruction of the world’s forests amounts to death of the world we currently know. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Because
of
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we are living in the era of Renaissance nowadays, the forest has become the main victim
unfortunately
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, in
this
 essay, I shall elaborate on
also
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according to
this
 topic.
To begin
 with, generally speaking about the forests .
This
is consider
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as
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a natural landmark,
hence
, it has
a
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numerous benefits for the ecosystem and eventually to
the
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humankind for many reasons:
firstly
,
however
, it
considers
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as
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a sign of beauty on the global earth,
secondly
;
which
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 is
also
 a crucial cause ,
thus
, it forms a main environment for the
animals
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 habitat.
Additionally
, it's
also
hasing
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having
 an action in hands_up against the dust and air pollution.
Furthermore
, the source of main
trees
 like cork
trees
.
On the other hand
, life upgrading,
as well as
 the time of revolution has become a factor in utilising the wood from the major and ancient
trees
inorder
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 to make a furniture or home ,
as a result
 in destroying a hundred of giant
trees
 to rise the industry level.
For instance
; data analysis detected a thousand
of
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trees
 are
cutting
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 off weekly to make
papers
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 and
similarly
,
for supplying
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the
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fire to make it flames up. I see the demand for
the
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natural plants
is
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 an important matter, which
is enable
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 us to meet our needs.
Although
,
the
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life's demands have indicated
for
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it,
but
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the balance
in
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 implantation and deforestation is
also
 a significant matter. I wholeheartedly concur with providing a reservation for
this
 natural implant. To sum it up,
while
 , the forest is a major reservoir for
a
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human demand,
therefore
, they should provide
a
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protection to them .
This
 is a crucial issue,
besides
, it should be
resitrected
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restricted
 and forbidden by the authorities, and the
ustilising
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utilising
also
ought
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 be under
a
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specialist supervision.
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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your main point and doesn't have sentence fragments. Mention your stance in a straightforward manner.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphing effectively, ensuring that each paragraph conveys a single main idea. Avoid long, run-on sentences and confusing punctuation.
task achievement
Develop your ideas more comprehensively. Give specific examples and facts to back up your points, and elaborate on them to demonstrate a clear understanding of the topic.
task achievement
Your essay covers the basic aspects of the topic and tries to provide a balanced view which shows a good understanding.
coherence cohesion
You attempt to use a range of vocabulary and sentence structures, which is commendable.

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