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Some people think that studying history is a waste of time while others think that its essential to learn. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

#people #history #waste #time
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history
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they
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 very important
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different
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views
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 and personaly I'm more with the first group. first people who
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important
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for some seasons,the main reason is knowing past events give us
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 about what
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 in the present and future .,Second , learning about
history
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experiences
experience
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floks
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folks
 to no be in the same problem and solve it.
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peole
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people
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achievements
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on the other hand
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might think it
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wast
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waste
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their
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learning
instead
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studying
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Furthermore
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history
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alot
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a lot
 of facts and not
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 credibility
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sometimes
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time
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alot
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a lot
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time
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studay
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studying
history
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libaries
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libraries
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, and that
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individual
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void
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 and be aible to it,for all before I completely agree with
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 team .
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grammar
Focus on grammar and sentence structure to make your essay more readable. For example, 'Studay history is prefer from some people and thwy think its very important' should be 'Studying history is preferred by some people, who think it is very important.'
structure
Work on improving logical flow and cohesion between paragraphs. Each paragraph should build on the previous one in a clear, logical order.
examples
Use more specific and relevant examples to support your points. For instance, you could mention specific historical events or lessons that are widely regarded as important to understand.
clarity
Revise introductory sentences to make them clearer. Your introduction should clearly outline the main points you are going to discuss.
task achievement
You have made an effort to discuss both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced approach to the essay topic.
task achievement
You have provided a personal opinion at the end, which is good for fulfilling the task requirements.

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