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Writing task 2 Some people say that it is better to work for a large company that a small one. Do you agree or disagree?

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The essay discusses
about
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where it is better to
work
if
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for a large a small
company
. I will try to show my views on these questions.
Firstly
, I think
that is
 fine to
work
 for a small
company
, because an
enviroment
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environment
 is more
familier
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familiar
 than a large
company
.
For example
, you know about each other, at
work
 - you can cooperate more close. The
teambuldings
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teambuilding
 are so much friendly,
funny
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and funny
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. I think the employees are here
more
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happier, everyone knows
privatly
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privately
 his/her director of
company
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the company
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. Usually has been in the start
upp
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up
 companies.
Secondly
, I think that
work
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 for a
larga
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large
company
 can be a little bit
frustaiting
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frustrating
, because there are a lot of
people
,
departments
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and departments
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,
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and no
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no
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not
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 everyone knows about each other. I think
this
 job is good for
people
 who worked before in
the
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a
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 small
company
. But for
people
 who have a lot of
work
´ s experience and love a lot of
people
 and opportunities at
work
. It is a very good opportunity.
Thirdly
, if I am thinking about my view on
thing
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things
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 - And be honest that after my 17
years
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years'
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of work´s
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work´s
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work
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experience
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experiences
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 it would be
more
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easier
work
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to work
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 in
the
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a
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 small
company
,
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 because for me it is
more
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a more
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 friendly and
confortamble enviroment
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comfortable environment
. In conclusion, it
dipends
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depends
 what are your priorities for
work
, benefits or experiences.
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Include more concrete examples to support your points. This will strengthen your arguments.
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Try to expand each point more fully, explaining and exploring each idea in greater depth.
Language
Work on sentence variety and reduce grammatical errors. This will enhance the readability of your essay.
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The essay clearly addresses the question by comparing work in large and small companies.
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The writer shares a personal perspective, which adds authenticity to the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
The conclusion recaps the main argument and provides a closing thought.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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