The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
The two maps provided the information about the city hospital’s
road
access in between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
, the hospital routes were enhanced with
few
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a few
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facilities,
such
as roundabouts,
bus
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a bus
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station, and a car
park
.
However
, the hospital remains
same
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the same
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.
According to
the first map, the city hospital was surrounded by a ring
road
,
also
it
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apply
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connected with a hospital
road
. There were six
bus
stops allocated for
the
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apply
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public access.
Moreover
, behind the
bus
stop
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stop,
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there was a car
park
designed for staff and
public
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the public
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. Three years later, they newly created two roundabouts to reduce the traffic. On the left side of the hospital
road
, they amended the
bus
stops as a
bus
station and it directly connects
the
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apply
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both roundabouts. In comparison with
previous
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the previous
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car
park
, they split and enlarged it
also
, they have provided separate entrances to the parking.
Therefore
, more
vehicle
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vehicles
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can
park
at the same time.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, bus, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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