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Band 6.5

You share your room with another studer in the college hostel. You find it very difficult to study there because he or She always has parties and friends visiting. write a letter to the hostel warden complaining about your displeasure with the roommate.

Dear sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to share my dissatisfaction with my roommate for several reasons.
Firstly
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, I am preparing for the IPS exams which is very important for me to achieve my goal, but she always distributes my study time.
Moreover
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, we all know no one is allowed after 10 pm in rooms, she is breaking the rule by inviting friends
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then
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and then
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 they do parties late at night twice a week.
Furthermore
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, all the time she plays music which creates some issues not only for me but
also
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 for
others
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other
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 rooms. As all complain to us she usually ignores them by saying sorry. She has been doing these things since
last
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 month. I told her verbally and I did not see any changes.
In addition
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,
last
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 night she invited all her friends because of her birthday, but all of them drank too much the whole night and created
mees
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messes
 in the room
while
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 eating and dancing which totally disappointed me. I hope you will take action to solve my problem. If possible, could you find a separate room for me on the ground floor close to
warden's
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the warden's
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 office
.
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?
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 Waiting for a prompt response from your side. With regards,

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task achievement
While your letter generally follows a good structure, make sure to clarify specific details about your requests. You could specify what time you require silence for studying.
coherence cohesion
For improved coherence, try to ensure each paragraph focuses on a single issue fully before moving on to the next point. More transitional phrases could help connect your ideas smoothly
task achievement
The tone you used is polite and appropriate for a formal letter of complaint, which is important for Task Achievement.
coherence cohesion
You effectively used a greeting and closing, making the letter feel complete and well-structured.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph mostly focuses on a single idea, contributing to the overall clarity of your letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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