In many cities the population is increasing. Some say that the urbanization process denies us knowing our neighbors, and this causes a loss of community sense. What is the main problem with this? What measures can be taken to overcome it?
Urban migration has been a burning topic , especially in
this
contemporary world today that has left many families and societies shuttered. The causes of Linking Words
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the measures that government officials can take to reduce their effect on the nation.
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To begin
with, there are many problems that are caused by rural-to-urban settlement, Linking Words
however
, the main one is the issue of exhaustion of resources. Linking Words
Initially
, employment statistics in countryside areas are low Linking Words
this
is because of a lack of development schemes that have to do with the infrastructure Linking Words
that is
meant to provide the residents with stable jobs Linking Words
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leading to a lack of job security within that part of the country, Linking Words
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then
choose to relocate to the township for greener pastures and better remunerations. Linking Words
Moreover
, as more and more citizens settle in cities, population demographics tend to escalate leading to overcrowding Linking Words
as a result
depletion of already scarce resources. To illustrate, Linking Words
according to
statistics from 2010 in the UK, there was a nearly over 50% population rise in London with most of the immigrants from rural areas in search of work, as Linking Words
such
the state had to increase its resource allocation in that city to meet up with the increasing numbers as already existing means were facing exhaustion.
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On the contrary
, there are measures that can be employed to cater for Linking Words
such
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Firstly
, it is the responsibility of the acting authority to come up with a framework that will boost and create jobs in remote areas Linking Words
such
as opening up ghost buildings, Linking Words
such
an act will the repercussions of urbanization and make individuals remain in their zone. Linking Words
In addition
, another plan of action will be to draw up a social security programme that will cater for the less fortunate, the elderly and those out of work. Linking Words
For example
, the Old Age, Survivors, and Disability Insurance (OASDI) program in the U.S.—is a program designed to provide partial income for retired adults, jobless and people with disabilities.
In conclusion, the main problem Linking Words
that is
caused by rural-urban migration is the overuse of available systems caused by unemployment which leads to overcrowding resulting in people competing for resources. Linking Words
However
, measures Linking Words
such
as job creation project plans and social security programs can be put into place to help reduce the effects .Linking Words
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Your essay addresses the task prompt well, discussing both problems and potential solutions effectively. However, some clarity is lost in your expression. Try to make your points more concise and clear.
coherence cohesion
While the essay is generally well-organized, there are occasional lapses in cohesion and coherence. Use more cohesive devices, like transition words, to enhance the flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
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supported main points
You provide well-supported main points and specific examples, especially in discussing the exhaustion of resources and social security programs.
introduction conclusion
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Word Count
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