living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can couse serious social problems, as well as practical problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays the rate of emigration has increased significantly and knowing a foreign
language
plays an important role in that.
Moreover
, speaking in other languages can be so hard and cause serious
problems
which depend on that. Honestly, I believe the differences between main languages are so important and maybe can cause many huge
problems
and put migrators in bad
troubles
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.
However
, knowing the languages of the destination
countries
is so necessary and important but
also
sometimes some people are not familiar with that and it will make a hard situation for them there.
Additionally
, the first line of communication and
prepare things
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for lives, accommodation and other things is
language
and if they are not in a great and suitable structure, they can not prepare a great atmosphere for themselves and their families in that country,
However
, it is possible but
also
so difficult.
Moreover
, at least being familiar with English can be helpful and beneficial but for most European
countries
, it's not enough.
On the other hand
, learning and studying can improve the situation of people in foreign
countries
, and improving skills can develop their condition in their
career
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and
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increase their salaries and make their lives better,
that depends
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depending
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on the
language
. In conclusion, knowing a foreign
language
, at least English as a common
language
all around the world, is so important and being familiar with the
language
of
destination
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more
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beneficial and awesome. Most of the
problems
depend on
language
and communication and these
problems
can create
an
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awful
condition
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conditions
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for people outside of their
countries
.
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coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence, consider using clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph that directly relate to the points being made. This would help guide the reader through your arguments more effectively.
task achievement
Supporting your points with more specific, concrete examples would help strengthen your arguments and illustrate your points more clearly. For instance, providing examples of real-life social or practical problems encountered by people living in foreign countries would be beneficial.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a clear introduction and a conclusive statement that summarizes the main argument effectively, which is a strong point in terms of structure.
task achievement
The essay addresses the prompt adequately, discussing both social and practical problems that can arise when living in a country where a foreign language is spoken.

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Social isolation
  • 2. Loneliness
  • 3. Social exclusion
  • 4. Community activities
  • 5. Cultural misunderstandings
  • 6. Cultural norms and values
  • 7. Social friction
  • 8. Social conflicts
  • 9. Employment challenges
  • 10. Language proficiency
  • 11. Job market
  • 12. Essential services
  • 13. Healthcare
  • 14. Legal aid
  • 15. Government support
  • 16. Practical problems
  • 17. Educational barriers
  • 18. Academic performance
  • 19. Future opportunities
  • 20. Integration process
  • 21. Adaptation
  • 22. Immigrants
  • 23. Foreign language
  • 24. Communication
  • 25. Wellbeing
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