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In sports, many young adults are inspired by famous
players
to pursue their dreams of becoming professional players
like their idols. This
trend definitely will have positive impacts on the youth, and can also
result in some drawbacks.
The exposure to social media about famous players
has spurred the interest of young people to train like their role models. For example
, a well-known football
player Kylian Mbappe
was inspired by Christiano Ronaldo (CR7), one of the greatest of all time in football
history, which I have witnessed too. When Mbappe
was still in the training phase as a kid, he used to watch the footage of CR7's skills and dream of playing like him. He also
collected pictures and stickers in his room, just to keep him motivated. Today, Mbappe
is now becoming the highest-paid football
player and also
joined the former club CR7, Real Madrid. This
phenomenon proves that dreaming of being like an idol will help the youths to succeed in their professional career.
Following famous players
could be also
a negative trend if the young players
do not believe in their natural potential. I strongly believe that each individual has a unique character that differs from everyone else. In my opinion, although
Mbappe
dreamed of being like CR7, Mbappe
is totally having different skills and styles in playing football
. The young generation should be able to dig deeply into their true potential and sharpen it.
In summary, having role models in sports will help the next young players
to stay motivated in achieving their dreams. However
, they should also
believe in their own potential.Submitted by fakhruddinmasse on
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