In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount that people can earn.Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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be received
a good amount of payment.
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future generations and the prosperity of the community.
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On the other hand
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on one main idea, making it easier for the reader to follow your argument. Try to use better transitions between different points to achieve a smoother flow.
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Work on providing clearer examples that are closely linked to the main points you are making. This will help support your argument more effectively.
general
Avoid grammatical errors and awkward phrasing to ensure clarity. For example, avoid sentences like "individuals should be received..." and instead use "individuals should receive..."
task achievement
Your ideas are clear and you do touch upon both sides of the argument, but ensure each point is thoroughly developed.
task achievement
You have provided a clear opinion on the topic within the introduction, which is crucial for task achievement.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, fulfilling the requirements for coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
The argument concerning the economic benefits of higher salaries is logically sound and valid.