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The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The table chart illustrates Australian and Malaysian populations including
birth
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rate
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 and average population increase per year and the number of people aged over 65
years
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 old, between the
years
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 1980 and 2002.
Overall
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, one noticeable feature of the data is that the number of Malaysian citizens considerably rose by 2002 compared to the total public of
Australia
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 at the same period of time.
According to
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 the
birth
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rate
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, both countries experienced a downward trend over 20
years
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, with
Malaysia
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's
birth
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rate
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 significantly dropping by 2002. Interestingly, the elderly citizens in
Australia
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 outnumbered that of Malaysians, around one-third of the total in comparison with
Australia
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's numbers. Regarding population growth,the total of residents residing in
Malaysia
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 substantially soared by 10 million over 20
years
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, with half of the total as male and another as female. As far as the
birth
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rate
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 is concerned,
Malaysia
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's historical record declined from 3.2% at the beginning of the period to 2.2%
at the end
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.
Consequently
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, the average total of population growth per year in
Malaysia
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also
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 outnumbered the figures for
Australia
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 which stood at approximately 1%
while
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 the other nation's number accounted for 2% over the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, rate, years, australia, malaysia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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