What are the causes and/ or effects of living in a big city?
Nowadays, there are many causes why most people want to live in big cities.
The reason
of
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for
it
is that there are numerous advantages, Correct pronoun usage
this
opportunities
and they can make their life more comfortable there. Living in big cities has a good effect on Correct word choice
and opportunities
the
society on the one Correct article usage
apply
hand
and it might have bad effects on the other
hand
.
Without a shadow of a doubt, living in a big cities
has many advantages. Healthcare Correct the article-noun agreement
a big city
big cities
fasilities
, Correct your spelling
facilities
hospitals
with Correct word choice
and hospitals
modrn
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modern
technics
thanks Correct your spelling
techniques
to
we have the best medical care and medicines Change preposition
apply
are
available for any state of Unnecessary verb
apply
diseases
. As well we have Fix the agreement mistake
disease
best
schools, colleges and universities,Correct article usage
the best
a
wide variety of food and Correct word choice
and a
entertainments
. we have so many various Fix the agreement mistake
entertainment
of
places Change preposition
apply
there
we can eat like restaurants, Correct your spelling
where
caffe
, fast food like McDonald's, KFC and others.
Other causes, Correct your spelling
cafes
cafe
Caffe
that
we can open up a great deal of career, education, and personal growth Add a missing verb
are that
opportunities
. I personally believe that living in a big city is really beneficial for us, and it has a bunch of opportunities
for folk, especially for young men who would like to have a better life.
Living in the town could have a good effect on us. For example
, if there a quantity
of hospitals and other institutions like that and Change the quantifier
number
due to
nation
will be Add an article
the nation
more
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apply
helthier
. Everybody could be more successful and more rich.
But there are Correct your spelling
healthier
also
bad effects for us. For instance
, big city's residents always harry to somewere
, have a Correct your spelling
somewhere
lot
stress and they could feel depressed. Things like that could harm our psychological health. Add the preposition
lot of
As well as
, people could be obesed
, Correct your spelling
obese
obsessed
obeyed
as a result
their
frequent visits to fast food.
In Change preposition
of their
conclusion
I would Add a comma
conclusion,
to
say that there are a lot of causes and effects of living in Change the verb form
apply
a
big Correct article usage
apply
citys
, there is a good side on Correct your spelling
city
cities
one
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the one
hand
and bad
side on Correct article usage
a bad
other
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the other
hand
, my opinion it
is if we live in a town we have a lot Correct pronoun usage
apply
if
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of
opportunities
to improve our life level, but we do not have to forget about our mental health and body health, we have to tear about ourselves.Submitted by katerina21.05 on
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coherence cohesion
The essay should be better structured with clear and distinct paragraphs for different points. Avoid repetition and ensure each paragraph contributes to answering the question.
task achievement
Address both advantages and disadvantages in more detail. Provide specific examples for both positive and negative impacts to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smoother transitions between different sections of the essay. This will help in maintaining a logical flow of ideas.
task achievement
Work on sentence structure and vocabulary usage to express ideas more clearly and accurately. Proofreading can help catch grammatical errors and typos.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly introduces the topic and sets up the context for discussing both causes and effects.
task achievement
Attempts to provide examples, which is a good effort towards illustrating points.
coherence cohesion
Conclusion summarizes the main points and provides a personal opinion, which is important for essay closure.
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
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