Topic: Obesity is a major healthy problem. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve this problem?

Nowadays, A primary health issue is

Obesity

there are many causes of

this

problem

. I personally believe

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a

behavioral

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diet and lack of exercise are the main roots of

this

problem

.

However

,

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point can be improved by the government and community. A major cause of

Obesity

is personality meals. Most people have

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increased popularity at fast-food restaurants which usually contain ingredients of flour, sugar, and fat when consumed for a long time, it causes to overweight

problem

.

For example

, junk food restaurants in Thailand

such

as KCF have been famous and most of the popularity that were researched by delivery applications their discount campaign was sold out after the announcement for 7 seconds.

For

this

reason, the number of obesities in Thailand is high for one-third of

population

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. To solve

this

problem

, governments should publicize nutrition balance and make people who have awareness of

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clean foods. Another cause of

Obesity

, Lack of exercise is the

most

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issue

of

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certain people. They are living with a long time

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the day for their work or study, based on

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the desk and electronic tools rather than physical activity so they are unable to burn the extra calories or

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. The best solution to

this

problem

;

parents

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and social

surrounding

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. Like,

Company

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,

Colleague

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, and

School

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schools

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should jointly develop

activity

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for exercise that will help to improve a healthy life.

To sum up

,

Obesity

is a significant

problem

and

need

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to

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improvement,

However

, it is a

problem

with clear solutions, should

government

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the government

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and community be willing to try them.