Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Digital technologies (for example, computers and smartphones) have improved the quality of communication between people. Use reasons and examples to explain your answer.
Some
people
agree that modern technology have
made communication more easier than without modern technology and some Change the verb form
has
people
disagree . Modern technology is a good thing to improves
communication between Wrong verb form
improve
people
. In this
essay
I will write about two points of view .
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essay,
Firstly
, Digital technologirs
are really important to improve Correct your spelling
technologies
the
communication . Correct article usage
apply
Secondly
, Human
can Fix the agreement mistake
Humans
calls
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call
his
Correct pronoun usage
their
friend
around the Fix the agreement mistake
friends
word
like someone lives in America and Correct your spelling
world
other
in Kuwait they can call each other by using mobile Correct quantifier usage
another
phone
. Fix the agreement mistake
phones
In addition
, maybe a student Correct pronoun usage
who studys
studys
abroad Correct your spelling
studies
studying
he
can communicate with his family . Correct pronoun usage
apply
Also
, the girl who got married when she went to her husbandes house she need
to Wrong verb form
needed
calles
her mother , father , brother and sister . Correct your spelling
call
Besides
to
, students can send emails to their teachers and their friends.
In the past when Change preposition
apply
people
did not have a
digital technologies calling each other was not Correct article usage
apply
easy
Rephrase
as easy
like
nowadays . Change preposition
as
Moreover
, human
writes a letter and to send it needs between two weeks and three weeks . In spite Correct article usage
a human
of
, Correct pronoun usage
of this
people
they
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apply
could not
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cannot
with
each other around the world Add a missing verb
being with
same
nowadays they send messages , Correct word choice
apply
calling
Wrong verb form
call
video
and send photos .
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videos
To conclude
, modern teacnology
Correct your spelling
technology
really
an amazing thing we have it . We should improve it and study hard to know more about digital technologies because it is important in our lives . Add a missing verb
is really
Finally
, we should save the mobiles and computers and learn how to use it
well .Correct pronoun usage
them
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