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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The charts below illustrate how the ownership of
eletrical
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electrical
 appliances
were
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was
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 changed. And
then
, housework in households
were
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was
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spended
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spent
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 the amount of time in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, it can be seen that a year had trends increased
while
 the hours per
weeek
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week
 had trends
diclined
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declined
. Looking at the line
on
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in
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 detail,
washing
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the washing
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 machine started at 40 in 1920, it
inhanced
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enhanced
 to 60 in 1940. After that, it
has grown
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grew
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 slowly
at
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to
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 10
percentage
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per cent
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 of
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the household
a household
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household
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households
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. And
then
, it decreased sharply
at
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to
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 65 in 1980.
Next,
It
growed
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grew
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 dramatically until
et
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at
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 the end period which
from
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was from
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 65 to 75.
Moreover
, Vakum cleaner opened at 30 in 1920
then
 it raised significantly, it began 30 to 100 from 1920 to 200. After that, it remained stable
at the end
 period at 100. The
last
, the
refrigator
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refrigerator
 opened at 5. After that, it has grown greatly to 100. And
then
, it has
stay
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stayed
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 steady at 100
at the end
 periods. Regarding the data hours
perweek
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per week
, starting in 1920 was at 50, it lowered remarkably to 20 in 1950.
Next,
It diminished slowly between 1980 and 2019 which was from 15 to 10.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, next, ".
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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