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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two pictures compare the differences between Porth Harbour in 2000 and today.
Overall
, we can see the current design involves making a number of changes to the western and southeast of the Porth Harbour. There is no development of car parks. The most noticeable change from today’s designated Porth Harbour is that there is one more shower and toilets near the car park which is without bathrooms.
Besides
, the location of fishing boats and marina (private yachts) is swapped place, and they build new cafes and shops area which nearby the lifeboat.
Moreover
, the place castle which had not use for a long time rebuilt into a hotel with a new road that
connect
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connected
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 to it,
it
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apply
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leading the public beach become to
the
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a
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 private beach for the hotel.
While
 the location of the two vehicles’ parking areas hasn’t changed, the road of the car park to the south connects to the main road.
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task achievement
Ensure that all your comparisons and descriptions are clear and specific. For example, it can be clarified how the 'location of fishing boats and marina has swapped places'. Specificity will enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Don't forget to include an explicit summary or conclusion. While the essay mentions major changes, it would benefit from a concluding sentence that wraps up the main points discussed.
coherence cohesion
Try to avoid minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasings such as 'Besides, the location of fishing boats and marina (private yachts) is swapped place'. An improvement could be: 'Additionally, the locations of the fishing boats and marina for private yachts have swapped'. This enhances readability.
task achievement
You've done a good job identifying and listing the most significant changes to the harbour from 2000 to the present day, such as the addition of cafes and shops, and the transformation of the old castle into a hotel.
coherence cohesion
The essay flows logically, guiding the reader through the various changes to the harbour in a way that is easy to follow. You've organized the information in a clear manner.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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