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The  process below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

#process #sugar #cane
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The given picture illustrates information about how
sugar
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 is produced from
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sugar
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 cane.   At a glance, it is apparent that, the process by which the
sugar
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 is produced
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 different ways. There are eight steps which
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 with growing and 
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 with drying and cooling.   
Firstly
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, looking at progress in detail, the process begins at the
sugar
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 canes are grown for 12 or 18 months.
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, it is harvested by special  machines or people. Before juice is purified in a limestone filter, the
sugar
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 canes are crushed by special
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machinery
. After the juice
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, it will be turned into syrup by
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an evaporator
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.   
The next step is
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 that, after the juice has been converted into syrup, the
sugar
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 crystals are
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separated
 by a centrifuge.
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,
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 product is sent to the
last
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 stage, where the
sugar
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 is
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dried
dry
dryed
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dried
 and cooled
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Try to include an introduction that briefly outlines what the diagram shows without repeating the task description. This will improve the overall coherence and make your essay sound more professional.
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Ensure that all stages in the process are clearly described and that you mention specific details where relevant. This will help in showcasing a thorough understanding of the process.
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Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure to enhance readability. Minor grammatical errors can detract from the overall clarity of your essay.
coherence cohesion
You have logically broken down the process into clear stages, making it easy for the reader to follow.
coherence cohesion
Your essay contains an appropriate amount of detail and follows a logical order, which is essential for a process description.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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