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You recently stayed in a hotel in a large city. The weather was very unusual for tI time of year and the heating/cooling system in the hotel was quite inadequate. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter give details of what was wrong explain what you had to do to overcome the problem at the time say what action you would like the manager to take

Dear Mr. Paul, I am Roy. I recently had a staycation at your hotel The Pacific , Canada from 25th August 2023 to 30th August 2023. I occupied the suite #501. Unfortunately, the weather conditions weren’t favourable, and I had to face many difficulties during my stay. The day I checked in the hotel the weather was warm and pleasant. But surprisingly the temperature had dropped to 7 degrees Celsius making it freezing cold.
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, I tried switching on the heater located in the room, and to my
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 it wasn’t working.
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 to that, the hot water wasn’t sufficiently warm enough. Despite my request for a replacement for the heater, the receptionist dint solve my problem. I was forced to use two blankets and an electric kettle to beat the cold. To sum it up, it was a horrible experience which I hadn’t thought of having
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from
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 an esteemed 5-star hotel. Kindly resolve
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 problem as soon as possible. I hope
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 you provide
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me with
a discount voucher that can be availed for my next trip. Yours sincerely, Roy

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task achievement
Try to give clearer details about the problems you faced, and use straightforward language to express your feelings.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas better. For example, you can use 'firstly', 'however', 'finally' to help structure your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure you include a closing statement that invites a response, such as asking for a prompt reply.
task achievement
Your letter has a clear purpose, which is to inform the manager about the problems and what you want.
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You did well in describing your experience and the steps you took to cope with the situation.
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