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Modern technology,such as personal computers and the internet, have made it possible for many people to do their work from home atleast part of the time instead of going to an office everyday. What are some advantages and disadvantages of this situation?

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Modern technology,
for
example
, personal computers and the internet, have made it easier for many people to
work
 from
home
 at least sometimes
instead
 of going to an
office
 every day. There are
advantages
 and
disadvantages
 of working from
home
. Working from any place
instead
 of working from the
office
 has some
disadvantages
. By making everybody
work
 from his own
home
, some of them are not going to
work
 as much as they can,
for
example
, they are going to take long breaks. People working from
home
 can not have social contact, and the results of not having social contact can affect their
work
 quality.
For
example
, my brother works as an assistant so one day the company that he works for decided to move their
work
 to another country, so my brother told them that he could not move to live there, so he worked from
home
 and he could not deal with customers .
However
, working from
home
 has some significant
advantages
. The company can afford a lot of money,
also
, employees can afford the gas money. Some employees can feel more comfortable
while
 they are working from
home
, which going to increase their
work
 rate.
Also
, they can
work
 from any place at any time,
for
example
 ,
before
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two weeks I was eating in a restaurant with my friend ,
while
Correct word choice
and while
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 , we were eating he was working . In conclusion, working from
home
 or working at the
office
 has
their
Correct pronoun usage
its
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advantages
 and
disadvantages
, but it is going to affect the
work
 quality in both decisions, so everyone can choose what suits them . In conclusion, working from
home
 or working at the
office
have
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has
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there
Correct your spelling
their
show examples
advantages
 and
disadvantages
, but it is going to affect the
work
 quality in both decisions, so
every one
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everyone
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 can choose what suits them .
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task response
Try to support your main points with more specific and diverse examples to strengthen your arguments and make your ideas clearer and more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the coherence of your essay by using a wider range of linking words and phrases to create smoother transitions between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which is important for coherence and cohesion.
task response
You have provided a balanced discussion by highlighting both advantages and disadvantages of working from home, which is good for task achievement.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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