In some large cities, people have to pay a fee when they drive their cars into the city centre, in a policy to reduce the number of cars in the city. Give reasons in support of and opposing this policy, and give your own opinion.
To discuss
about
the driving Remove the preposition
apply
fee
for the cars to enter the city
centre
in some large cities. In order to reduce the number of cars in the city
, people
has
to pay a driving Change the verb form
have
fee
to enter city
Add an article
the city
centre
. In my opinion, paying a fee
to enter the city
is good
initiative for the Add an article
a good
city
benefit, so the less Change noun form
city's
people
can able to visit the place.
Firstly
, People
around the world travel to some large cities for sightseeing or to participate in other activities in and around. On the other hand
, People
visiting the cities for sightseeing, might wants
to reach Change the verb form
want
city
Correct article usage
the city
centre
to get experience on
the local food or events. Change preposition
of
For instance
, Sports people
has
been travelling to other special/popular countries and they Change the verb form
have
keen
to visit the important places in Add a missing verb
are keen
city
Add an article
the city
centre
.
To support the city
policy, people
can be able to pay the driving fee
to enter the city
centre
at a minimal amount for like 24hrs or 12hrs of time,
because it helps the authority to maintain the sufficient development of the Remove the comma
apply
city
and to
others as well. It generates the Change preposition
apply
people
that, visit to
the crowded or popular Remove the preposition
apply
place
over Fix the agreement mistake
places
the
time, Correct article usage
apply
will
make the place even more crowded , especially for the local living Correct pronoun usage
which will
people
.
In conclusion, paying a driving fee
to enter the city
is a good initiative among the people
. As a result
, city
will not be crowded and Add an article
the city
people
visiting can able to enjoy the places peacefully.Submitted by yabloothedinesh on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
task achievement
The essay addresses the topic and provides some relevant points both for and against the policy. However, it needs a clearer structure and organization. Consider creating a more distinct layout for each argument and your opinion.
task achievement
Your ideas are often clear, but there are some inconsistencies in language use and grammar that make parts of the essay harder to read. Review your grammar and make sure each sentence flows smoothly into the next.
coherence cohesion
Try to incorporate a broader range of vocabulary to make your essay more engaging. In addition, ensure each paragraph transitions logically to the next.
coherence cohesion
A more thorough and balanced argument could be presented. Consider expanding on points with more specific examples or evidence to support your ideas.
task achievement
The essay makes a good effort at addressing both sides of the argument and presenting a personal opinion.
coherence cohesion
The main ideas you present are relevant to the topic and show a clear understanding of the issue.
Fully explain your ideas
To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).
For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.
Ultimate Speaking practice for IELTS
Practice speaking step by step, answer real-life questions, and build your confidence. Start your free trial and improve your speaking skills today!