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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think is a good idea or a waste of time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant exaxples from your own knowledge or experience

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Introduction
In the past
years
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years,
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 a tendency
of taking
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to take
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a
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apply
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time
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 off before attending university
have
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has
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 grown strongly.Every
year
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 more and more
schoolars
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schoolers
 prefer to take a
year
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 off before going to
academy
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the academy
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.The
gap
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year
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 utility is agreed
,as
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upon,as
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advantages
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the advantages
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 outweigh
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the disandvantages
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disandvantages
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disadvantages
.
This
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 essay will prove it by explaining the opportunities of taking
an
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year
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 off.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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,the
gap
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year
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allow
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allows
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 minors who just finished
school
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 to take their
time
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 and think
who
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about who
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 they wanna be.
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,
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 Cambridge University in the UK surveyed over 500 students in 2018 and reported that around 70% had completed a
gap
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year
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 before starting their chosen
course
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,
while
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 96% of students who had taken the
year
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 off confirmed their
contemnent
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contemned
 of
chosen
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the chosen
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course
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,others 30% of learners had only 86%
contemnent
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contemned
 of
chosen
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course
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.
This
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 shows that taking the
time
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 off can actually help decide
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on goals
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 in life before attending
academy
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an academy
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Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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,the free
time
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 can be
spended
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spent
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 on
traveling
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travelling
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 and relaxing,preparing yourself for the academy
course
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.
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,Oxford University in 2020 constituted that those students who had taken a travel
year
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 are more consistent and couraged for new knowledge.
This
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 means the travel
year
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 can be considered as the
year
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 of well-deserved rest after a
school
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 graduation,helping people to clear their minds and prepare
themselfes
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themselves
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 for the new learning.
Conclusion
In conclusion,the
gap
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year
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 agreed
having
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to have
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 a positive impact on just-graduated learners.It is recommended
taking
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to take
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 the
year
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 off after
the
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apply
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school
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 in case of
having
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have
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 difficulties choosing
future
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a future
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proffession
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profession
 or
being
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are
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 exhausted after long
school
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 years.

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task response
Your essay provides a reasonable amount of detail and examples to support your main points, but there are several grammatical errors and some awkward phrasing that affects clarity. Try to proofread your work or ask a friend to review it before submission to catch any minor mistakes. A few changes in vocabulary could also make your ideas clearer.
coherence cohesion
The organization of the essay can be improved. Your points are generally clear but the transitions between them are somewhat abrupt. Use more linking phrases or transitional words to make the flow of the essay smoother.
task response
Good conclusion! You summarize the main points well and provide a clear recommendation, which rounds off the essay nicely.
task response
You have included both personal examples and survey results to support your views, which enhances the persuasive power of your argument.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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