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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The illustrated bar chart depicts the
divorce
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rates
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 in two European countries between 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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, the countries exhibited opposite trends, with one showing a decline
while
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 the other experienced an increase in
divorce
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rates
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.
To begin
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 with, Finland experienced a downward trend in
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rates
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 during the initial two years, dipping to just over 30% in 2012.
However
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, from 2013 onwards, the
rate
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 steadily increased, reaching 40% by 2014, and remained stable in 2015.
In contrast
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, Sweden started with an upward trend, with
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rates
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 rising from just over 40% in 2011 to nearly 50% in 2012.
However
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,
this
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 was followed by a continuous decline, bringing the
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 down to below 40% by 2015. From the diagram, it can
also
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 be observed that
while
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 Sweden significantly reduced its
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rate
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 over the years, Finland's
rate
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 rose considerably, reversing the initial downward trend
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, rates, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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