You recently heard that a close friend of yours has had a baby, and you purchased a gift for the baby. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you should: Congratulate them on the arrival of the baby Describe the gift you have chosen for the baby Suggest arrangements for your visit to deliver the gift.

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Dear Selina, How are you and your little

baby

I’m

so happy for you! I recently heard the good news about your delivery.

I’m

writing to let you know that

I’ll

be coming to meet you and your

baby

and,

I’ll

be bringing a special gift for him. I’d like to congratulate

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you and your husband on the birth of your

baby

boy. I can’t express how excited

I’m

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I am

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to meet him. I can’t wait enough to see his face and show my love towards him. I purchased a small gift for him which is a blue colour

baby

rattle. It is in a box and it has a wing on

bottom

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the bottom

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parts which makes a noise and looks so beautiful. On top of that, I decided to buy

this

because you can hang it on top of his hiccup and he’d laugh after seeing it.

I’ve

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I have

I have got

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a Christmas break next week so

I’m

planning to come to your house on 27th December. I’ve

also

booked

a train tickets

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train tickets

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for me and my daughter. It will be one night journey for us and

I’ll

arrive in the morning around 8 o’clock.

I’ll

see you next week. Give my best to everyone in the family. Best wishes, Heena

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coherence cohesion

Your letter is well-structured, but consider refining some sentences for clarity. For example, 'It is in a box and it has a wing on bottom parts which makes a noise and looks so beautiful.' can be revised to 'It comes in a box and has wings at the bottom that make a pleasant noise. It looks so beautiful.'

coherence cohesion

Pay attention to small grammatical errors to improve clarity. For example, 'a blue colour baby rattle' should be 'a blue baby rattle'.

task achievement

You have effectively covered all the task requirements by congratulating your friend, describing the gift, and suggesting a time for your visit.

task achievement

Your tone is warm and friendly, which is suitable for the purpose of the letter.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing are appropriate and add to the overall coherence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

208 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Heartfelt congratulations
Newborn baby
Exciting and joyous time
Thoughtful gift
Special features
Hope you will enjoy
Delightful surprise
Eager to meet
Flexible schedule
Adjust to a new routine

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