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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. The amount spent is in hundred thousand pounds. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. The amount spent is in hundred thousand pounds. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the
money
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 spent by four European
countrie
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countries
 (
France
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,
Britain
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, Italy and,
Germany
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) on different products. Units are in
Pounds
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.
Overall
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,
Britain
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 spent
most
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the most
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amount
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 of
money
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 on almost all
the
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apply
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consumer goods
while
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Germany
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 spent the least. Photographic film was the most popular product in
Britain
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,
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However
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However,
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 toys and CDs were the least purchased item in
Germany
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.
To begin
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 with,
France
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 and Italy spent exactly
same
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the same
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amount
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 of
money
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 on toys i.e. 157.5 hundred
thousan
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thousand
pounds
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 .
While
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,
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Britain
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 spent almost 170
hundered
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hundred
thousand
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pounds
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.
Furthermore
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, tennis racquets
was
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 one fine category in which all
the
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four countries spent less than 155 hundred
thousand
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pounds
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.
In addition
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 to that,
France
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 and
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germany
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Germany
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 spent
equal
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an equal
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amount
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 of
money
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 on personal stereo i.e. 146
hundered
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hundred
thousand
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respectevely
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respectively
however
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 Italy spent a little more around 150
hunderend
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hundred
thousand
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pounds
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. Moving on, Perfume was the only category in which
France
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 spent
least
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the least
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amount
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 of
money
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,
while
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 Italy and
Britain
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 spent 155 and 160
hunderend
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hundred
thousand
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pounds
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 respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, france, britain, germany, pounds, amount, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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