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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. The amount spent is in hundred thousand pounds. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. The amount spent is in hundred thousand pounds. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given bar chart illustrates the
money
 spent by four European
countrie
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countries
 (
France
,
Britain
, Italy and,
Germany
) on different products. Units are in
Pounds
.
Overall
,
Britain
 spent
most
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the most
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amount
 of
money
 on almost all
the
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consumer goods
while
Germany
 spent the least. Photographic film was the most popular product in
Britain
,
However
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However,
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 toys and CDs were the least purchased item in
Germany
.
To begin
 with,
France
 and Italy spent exactly
same
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the same
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amount
 of
money
 on toys i.e. 157.5 hundred
thousan
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thousand
pounds
 .
While
,
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Britain
 spent almost 170
hundered
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hundred
thousand
pounds
.
Furthermore
, tennis racquets
was
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were
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 one fine category in which all
the
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four countries spent less than 155 hundred
thousand
pounds
.
In addition
 to that,
France
 and
germany
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Germany
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 spent
equal
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an equal
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amount
 of
money
 on personal stereo i.e. 146
hundered
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hundred
thousand
respectevely
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respectively
however
 Italy spent a little more around 150
hunderend
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hundred
thousand
pounds
. Moving on, Perfume was the only category in which
France
 spent
least
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the least
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amount
 of
money
,
while
 Italy and
Britain
 spent 155 and 160
hunderend
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hundred
thousand
pounds
 respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, france, britain, germany, pounds, amount, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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