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The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates a country's
overall
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percentage
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 of
films
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 released and
overall
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percentage
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 of
cinema
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ticket
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sales
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 in 1996 and 2006. The
percentage
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 is based on four film categories ;
drama
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,
comedy
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,
fantasy
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 and
romance
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.
Overall
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,
drama
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 had the highest
percentage
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 of
films
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 released in 1996,
however
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,
comedy
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 had the highest
percentage
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 of
cinema
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ticket
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sales
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 both in 1996 and 2006. In 1996, there were over 25% of
drama
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films
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 released
while
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fantasy
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films
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 released were almost 50% less than that of
drama
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films
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.
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,
romance
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films
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 had the lowest
percentage
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 of
films
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 released with around 8% which has remained constant by 2006.
On the other hand
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,
comedy
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 had the biggest
percentage
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 of
cinema
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ticket
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sales
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 in 1996 with 20%
while
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drama
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 only had over 15% of
ticket
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sales
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.
Romance
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films
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 only had 5%
cinema
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ticket
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sales
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 which is around 40% more than that of
fantasy
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films
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 with only around 3% theatre
ticket
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sales
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 making
fantasy
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films
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 having the lowest
percentage
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 of
cinema
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ticket
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sales
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 in 1996. In 2006, there was an increase in the
percentage
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 of
films
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 released but
drama
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films
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 still had the highest
percentage
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 at 35% , followed by
comedy
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films
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 and
fantasy
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films
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 with 25% and around 17% respectively.
Then
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 again,
comedy
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films
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 had the highest
percentage
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 of
cinema
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ticket
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sales
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 with around 23% followed by
drama
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films
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 with around 17%.
Moreover
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,
romance
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films
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 had the lowest
percentage
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 of theatre
sales
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 with around 2%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, films, cinema, ticket, sales, drama, comedy, fantasy, romance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 12 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 7 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
  • distributors
  • audiences
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