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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.
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The line graph illustrates the medium
temperature
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 per month,
while
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 the table describes the
number
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 of
hours
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 of sunshine annually in three given cities namely
London
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, New
York
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 and
Sydney
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.
Overall
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, there is a similar upward trend in the figure for
temperature
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 in each month in New
York
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 and
London
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whereas
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 that
number
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 in
Sydney
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 experiences a contrasting movement over the given period.
In addition
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, the average figure for sunshine
hours
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 in New
York
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 ranks the highest,
on the other hand
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, that
number
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 in
London
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 takes the lowest position. A more detailed look at the graph clearly shows that in the first quarter of the year, the
temperature
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 in
Sydney
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 remains stable at over 25
degrees
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 before hitting
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rock bottom at merely 15
degrees
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then
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 continues its period of stability at exactly 25
degrees
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.
Furthermore
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, the average
temperature
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 in
London
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 reaches a peak from under 10
degrees
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 to approximately 25
degrees
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. That
number
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 in New
York
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 witnesses the same trend over the given period, it increases minimally from around 5 to 7
degrees
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then
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 hits the highest point, at 30
degrees
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 and goes down to 5
degrees
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 by the end of the year.
Additionally
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, the
number
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 of
hours
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 of sunlight in New
York
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 and
Sydney
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 is the highest , accounting for about 2500
hours
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 per year.
In contrast
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, that data in
London
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 was the lowest, at 1180 annual
hours
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, number, hours, london, york, sydney, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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