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it is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best both for the individual and for society. do you agree or disagree?

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some
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 believe that individuals should be encouraged to get
marry
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 before the age of 30, as it benefits both the person and society. I disagree with
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 view, I believe that
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 about personal choice rather than societal expectation. One argument in
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 of early
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 is that it provides stability. When
people
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 marry younger, they have more time to build a strong foundation for their family and career.
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, younger couples may find it easier to have children and raise them with financial security as they grow older. From a societal perspective, stable families contribute to a more balanced and organized community, reducing issues
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 as loneliness and declining birth rates.
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, despite these potential benefits, encouraging
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 to marry before 30 is not always practical or beneficial. Many individuals prioritize their education and career in their 20s, which helps them achieve financial stability before making a lifelong commitment. Forcing
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 into
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 at a young age may lead to unhappy relationships, as they may not yet be emotionally or financially prepared.
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, in today’s modern society, many cultures accept diverse lifestyles, and
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 is no longer seen as a necessity for personal happiness or social success. In conclusion,
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 getting married before 30 may have advantages for some, it should not be encouraged as a general rule. Individuals should be free to decide when they are ready for
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, based on their personal circumstances rather than societal expectations. Ultimately, a successful
marriage
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 depends on maturity, compatibility, and emotional readiness rather than age.

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Consider elaborating on the societal benefits of early marriage with specific examples or statistics to strengthen your argument.
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Try to include more nuanced points about why some individuals may choose to marry later, which would provide a balanced view.
strength
The essay presents a clear opinion and effectively structures the introduction and conclusion.
strength
Arguments against early marriage are well articulated and provide a thoughtful perspective on personal choice.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fertility
  • Maternal health
  • Psychological stability
  • Social maturity
  • Economic benefits
  • Shared responsibilities
  • Ancestral customs
  • Cultural imperatives
  • Personal development
  • Career establishment
  • Societal norms
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Divorce rates
  • Life decisions
  • Subjective wellbeing
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