Some people think history has little or nothing to offer, while others say the study of the past helps us understand the present. Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion.

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People have different views about whether studying history is useful or it is

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waste of time.

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there has been a great change in the way we live on

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planet, still I believe there's a lot we can learn about current

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by studying history. On

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hand, with the advancement of science and

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our lifestyle has faced extreme change from the past. We have learnt a lot about the whole universe and we have made specific devices to meet our needs. With

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knowledge and tools it is obvious that some solutions that our ancestors used aren't useful or even valid anymore.

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our careless behaviour toward

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caused the whole climate to change and

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there are many problems that

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never existed before.

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, there are several advantages

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learning about the past.

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, it is said

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that history repeats itself. It is believed that people will act the same in similar situations, so if you don't learn your lessons you will possibly repeat your mistake.

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it is important to understand what reasons caused wars in the past.

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, by learning the process that things went through to reach their current state, we can improve them.

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, it is important to know where are we from

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how are ancients lived and what sort of things they valued. In conclusion, I believe

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even though

we are living differently from our ancestors, learning about how they used to live will help us avoid repeating their wrongs and improving their good works.

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logical structure

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The essay covers both viewpoints comprehensively, providing a balanced discussion on the usefulness of studying history.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

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Topic Vocabulary:

anachronistic
cultural heritage
perspective
historical context
societal norms
contemporary
evolution
progress
modern advancements
conflicts
tensions
academic
practical skills
subjective
victors
marginalized groups
dwelling on the past
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Some people think history has little or nothing to offer, while others say the study of the past helps us understand the present. Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be rewuired to work in the country where they did their trainig. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Many young people regularly change their jobs over the years. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays people use bicycles less as a form of transport. Why is this the case? What can we do to encourage people to use bicycles more? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

In many countries, the government prioritises economic growth above all other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

In the future, nobody will buyprinted newspapers or books because they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?