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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates data about how households in one nation spent their weekly profit in the years 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, they have provided eight categories of activities. In the beginning period, the majority of people spent their weekly
income
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 on food.
While
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 in the latest year, they spent on leisure activity.
According to
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 the bar chart, in 1968
highest
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the highest
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 percentage of money
spent
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was spent
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for
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on
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 food.
However
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,
lowest
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the lowest
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 percentage of
income
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provided
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is provided
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 for fuel and power. People equally spent their
income
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to
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on
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 housing, clothing, and footwear by 10%, which is the second highest.
Moreover
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, in comparison with 1968, people spent their
income
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for
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on
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 food
reduced
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was reduced
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half
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by half
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 in the year 2018. Housing accounted for around 10% in 1968.
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, in 2018 it doubled
with
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by
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 approximately 20%,
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and the
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 demand for housing was high.
Secondly
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, there was around 7% of cash expended on household goods in both years, there is no changes happened in ten years. Families spent equal money
for
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on
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 personal goods, transport, and leisure in 1968.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • income
  • consumer habits
  • percentage
  • cost of living
  • discretionary spending
  • inflation-adjusted
  • financial priorities
  • budget allocation
  • socioeconomic changes
  • technological advancements
  • housing and utilities
  • goods and services
  • gain insight into
  • luxuries vs. necessities
  • trend analysis
  • significant increase/decrease
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