Some people think that the development of technology helps to reduce crime, while otherpeople think it encourages crime. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Technology
has been improving over the
last
few years with yearly upgrades to phone and computer systems.
This
has been a point of contention for some
people
as they think that the enhancement of
technology
has aided in reducing
crimes
while
others think that it encourages crime. In
this
essay, I will talk about both sides and how I think
technology
encourages
people
to commit
crimes
. In recent years, there has been a constant improvement of technological devices that enable
people
to monitor one's business or house. The rise of home security cameras and ring doorbell cameras would deflect potential criminals from entering other
people
's houses or committing
crimes
. There has been a decrease in trespassing and stealing valuable items from houses.
Also
, the rise of social media has enabled the community to spread awareness of the criminal acts done through social media.
For example
, in my hometown, growing up there was a high rate of house break-ins and theft,
however
, since
people
have started putting security cameras around and inside their homes, there has been a steady decline in these
crimes
.
On the other hand
, as
technology
advances, so does the crime rate.
Technology
has been helping in reducing
crimes
like theft and robbery but other types of
crimes
have increased. Since
people
have the need to keep up with the advancing world, they tend to commit fraud to be able to purchase newer gadgets like smartphones and computers.
For example
, in my hometown, a group of employees were imprisoned for selling illegal substances as a way of paying back their debt. Police mentioned that their debt
due to
exorbitant spending on gadgets had led these
people
to commit
such
acts.
Moreover
, social influencers release videos that encourage unpleasant behaviours like prank videos.
This
has resulted in multiple
people
having bodily harm
due to
these pranks.
For example
, an influencer released a video about how they planned and successfully smashed the birthday girl's face onto the cake.
This
has gone viral and many have joined the trend, unluckily multiple
people
have been injured by
this
due to
their cake having wooden dowels as cake support. One of the victims has suffered total vision loss
due to
this
prank. In conclusion, technological advancement has been beneficial in decreasing criminal acts like theft and trespassing.
However
,
this
improvement has
also
led to an increase in the selling of illegal substances to keep up with the advancement and bodily harm
due to
the videos spread around using these devices. In my opinion, these innovations have more detrimental effects than positive effects.
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