Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are split arguments regarding the banning from using their gadget for scholars in their

school

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. Some people believe that it will

helps

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their family to keep in contact with them,

while

another group of thinkers support that bringing

phones

to the academic area could be dangerous. Both

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own pros and cons, and my position will be discussed in the

further

paragraphs. Discussing the former opinion, the regulation of allowing children

using

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their mobile

phones

in

school

could make their parents communicate easier with them. By

this

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I mean that when there are some

reschedule

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agendas in

school

or when the children are not in

a good conditions

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, mom and dad can control

these kind

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of

phenomenon

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and get the information directly by

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their

child

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children

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with their

phones

.

However

, their supervisor in

school

should make sure the time consuming by

those

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young generation is in the rest time only or after the learning process is finished already. Based on my experience, my younger brother who

bring

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his phone to

school

, can

informed

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the families about his situation as soon as possible and it would impact on reducing our anxiety about his health.

However

, those who support the idea of banning phone usage in study place

area

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would think that it can be a threat

for

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student's safety

due to

its potential

attracted

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by

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apply

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the

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robbers.

Additionaly

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Additionally

, the overuse of the gadget can

also

impact

on

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the lack of concentration in

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the study

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study

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studies

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because they would

preffered

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prefer

to play games with their phone rather than to

listen

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their educators.

Morever

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,

this

could lead to

the

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screen fatigue and reduce the motivation

of learning

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in their schools. In conclusion, it seems to me that the stronger argument is in favour of allowing students

bringing

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their

phones

in

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school

, but with the control

for

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their teachers for not using

it

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them

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in

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during

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the

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study time, rather than not

allow

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them at all.