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Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter ● state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this ● give details of how you have benefited from the club ● explain why you want to leave

#club #secretary #type #membership
Good afternoon, dear sir/madam. First of all, let me say, that our sport club is the best I have ever seen. I have had the platinum family membership for the
last
 5 years, with
the
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 very affordable payment of
the
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apply
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150$ per month. My family and I are using the gym and the pool at least 3 times weekly. I have
to notice
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an
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the
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 amazing yoga classes,
the
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useful diet lectures, and
very
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 helpful trainers. We have a lot of pleasure all over the year.
Moreover
,
outdoor
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 hiking events, which your club conducted, were adorable, and we and our children had a great time. Unfortunately, we have to move to another province
due to
 the work, so we are forced to interrupt our membership. We will be very glad to get your advice about the best club in the M.. city. Sincerely
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, Anastassia.
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coherence cohesion
Break the text into clearer paragraphs: one for stating your membership type and payment, another for detailing the benefits you received, and a separate one for explaining why you need to leave.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph conveys a single main idea to improve clarity and readability.
task achievement
The letter provides a complete response addressing all the points in the prompt.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is suitable, friendly, and polite.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a logical structure with an appropriate greeting and closing.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual membership
  • monthly subscription
  • premium membership
  • direct debit
  • credit card payment
  • exclusive events
  • state-of-the-art facilities
  • networking opportunities
  • relocation
  • financial constraints
  • diversifying interests
  • expressing gratitude
  • amicable departure
  • future correspondence
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