It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
Many things
people
do, they must take risks
in both their professional and personal lives
. This
essay will discuss about advantages and disadvantages, of these causes including two points: resilience and mental health issues.
On the one hand, it is most important when people
can bravely take a risk in their lives
. The main reason is they can understand resilience. That means they can survive and improve their career or personal lives
. For instance
, when some people
work in a company, they have enormous assignments and also
they are forced to finish their work as well. Although
some assignments do not work perfectly, thus
they should make a good decision to solve these problems
. Moreover
, as can be seen in personal lives
is about their family. Some people
believe that before there are some problems
will happen, they should have good communication with their family.
On the other hand
, some people
regard there as one drawback of taking risks
both in personality and professional life. Many times, when some people
have problems
they cannot solve them well, usually it can have bad effects such
as mental health issues. Some people
feel they cannot understand how the best solution to solve, thus
they prefer to avoid problems
rather than search the solutions. After that, some disadvantages will come to their life like they feel stress and reduced interaction with other people
due to
they feel fail because they do not have the ability to see many risks
in their life.
In summary, there are advantages and disadvantages when some people
take risks
their challenges in their personal and professional circumstances. When some people
are brave enough to take risks
, they have good resilience in their lives
. In contrast
, if they are afraid to take risks
, they will have other problems
, especially mental health issues.Submitted by writingbersama on
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