Some people believe that having a pet such as a cat or a dog helps older people live a more enjoyable life and try to stay healthier. How do you think older people benefit from having a pet? Do you think there is a problem with older people having pets? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
There is no denying that having
pets
brings many positives to people
, especially seniors. This
essay agrees that there are emotional and some health advantages to adopting a cat or a dog on
older Change preposition
for
people
.
To begin
with, the elderly who live without their children can find emotional support thanks to pets
. Take an example, a dog can become a friend for a short walk, or it may be an escort for people
who need guidance. In this
way
, grandparents can escape feeling alone and can enjoy. Personally, being friends with a pet for seniors is the best way
to have enjoyable memories. Moreover
, it does not provide valuable emotions only for people
but also
for pets
, and in this
way
, they can feel love and faithfulness for each other.
Another reason why I agree, living with a pet provides physical and mental health. If people
have a friend in their home, they have to allow time for them such
as feeding them,
or playing. Remove the comma
apply
This
obligation provides physical activity and responsible feeling to people
. In this
way
, they can have daily physical routines and some responsibilities. I strongly believe that when people
have a responsibility, especially in their daily routine, it establishes a strong bridge between their mental and physical health.
In conclusion, for the elderly, sharing their home with pets
is effective in overcome
loneliness and some possible physical and mental challenges. In my mind, Wrong verb form
overcoming
pets
should be adopted especially by the elderly, as it provides many advantages not only for people
but also
for pets
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to explain the relationship between ideas clearly so that they flow logically. For example, you could explain how feeling emotionally supported by a pet translates into overall well-being.
coherence cohesion
Use transition words and phrases to help the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs, for instance, 'Furthermore,' or 'Additionally,' could help link your ideas more smoothly.
task achievement
Avoid vague statements like 'they can feel love and faithfulness for each other.' Instead, specify what behaviors or attitudes illustrate love and faithfulness.
task achievement
Consider including more specific examples or studies to make your points more persuasive. For example, mention research on how dog walking has improved older people's fitness levels.
coherence cohesion
The introduction is clear and sets up the essay's argument effectively.
task achievement
Your essay clearly responds to the task by discussing both advantages and potential issues for older people having pets.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the essay's main points and gives a clear personal viewpoint.
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