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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought over the world. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

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In the modern era,
the
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food
 is not valued as much as it
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 to be by our ancestors. We often see the
food
 getting disposed
off
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 in the garbage bins rather than getting consumed.
This
 essay will highlight the reasons behind
wastage
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the wastage
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 of
food
 and measures
with
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 which we can
prevent
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prevent it
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.
To begin
, one of the biggest
reason
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reasons
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 behind the ongoing problem is
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the availabilty
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availabilty
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availability
 of various types of
food
 and larger portions. The nutritional companies in order to reduce their stock
sells
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 the
lager
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larger
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 portion at better
pricing
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prices
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 than the smaller ones.Which results in purchasing
food
 more than the required quantity.
The another
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 reason is that
,
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the
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package
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 meals or junk
food
 are high in carbs which makes
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it diffcult
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diffcult
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difficult
 for
the
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humans to finish
it
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them
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.
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The essay addresses the prompt directly and clearly states the main reasons for food wastage.
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The structure of the essay is easy to follow, with clear paragraphs focusing on specific points.

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